I've read the first 14 chapters and it pretty decent not that far off from other yandere stories I've read on this site, that is, as long as the chapters keep updating... the writing quality is good but with some minor errors here and there nothing a small grammar check wont fix. character design is a bit on the weak side mainly due to mc's physique, which I hope he can control eventually. The story is still in its early stages so I can t really talk about the Development much, but as long as there isn't too much f**king and explicit scenes that need more than a full chapter to complete, then I'm personally fine with it. On a side note I suggest making the power levels a bit more clear cut and understandable(by that I mean giving us a proper scope of what the essential peak is of a mortal and a bit about at what point are the considered a god or at the level of a god). The current world building is a bit weak as well, we aren't really given much of a good description of certain environments in the story (for example the forest the mc is currently in in chapter 14, I cant really tell what the exact setting is as it s probably a lush forest but it could be alot of other things. I'd say give out small detail of the surrounding like the fauna and flora there. small details bring a big difference to the overall quality of writing). Well thats about it, hope ya have fun writing author-san.
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Thank you alot for the honest review. I will try to do my best to improve my writing along the way. Tips like this helps me alot as I am an early writer. Hope to have your support all the way to the end of the story......馃槉
