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Not to mention that there is no real problem. The protagonist can create everything at no cost and from nothing. Solving many things and with no apparent explanation. He wants to take people to his house, as if they were dogs, for no real reason, there is no internal monologue that explains why he wants to take Asia to his house. Not to mention that all the chapters become anime expressions of blush and things like that, but what really happens, they are disgusting hints and without any narrative coherence. I mean, they appeared all of a sudden, Rias taking an interest in the main character in the chat, but without seeing him, she's already taunting him with love or at least enough interest to want to form a relationship (I mean, she didn't even see the photo of him) . The entire DXD arc is Rias blushing, the main character creating living things out of thin air and at no cost or real problem, getting hints of couple jokes; which ends with the main character kissing Rias or the other way around, (I blew up the chapter after getting fed up (I left it at 6)) and saying that he fell in love with her, when it seemed like all he was doing is playing games. In short, this started well, but the author does not know how to tell the story, or pose it for the reader to read. Reason why everything seems taken from an anime that does not take things seriously (it would be understood if it is a must from time to time, but when it is the whole story, then it does not work). Summing up everything really: it is a fanfic that is good in idea, but poorly executed. A fanfic that looks like it was made by a beginner. The fanfic does not entertain or fulfill what one expected from a dimensional group chat.