Review Detail of DaisukiDayoSenpai in .

I've read up until chapter 6 and now on chapter 7 and I could say that the story is really in-depth and very descriptive. As a piece of literary art, this could very well go for the first prize! But as a novel, having too much description can be a double-edged weapon. There were times when I skimmed through the descriptions and just read the main plot points and I still could follow through. I wouldn't say you're writing is not for novels because that would insult myself as well. As a novelist, I aspire to write as descriptively as you, you know ehehe. But when it comes to novel, one should keep in mind that every reader here just read to pass the time and escape from work, a majority even read on the go. That's why, you can't put too much details without advancing the story as much as you descriptively depict it. In other words, finding the balance of descriptions, scene-building, dialogue, and story-advancement is what would help with this book the most. I also noticed that your chapters are a bit too long. When I first started writing in webnovel, my editor advised me to cut my chapters short because my chapters were 4k words long. He said having a chapter with 1k to 1.5k words increases the valid reads by a lot. Of course, you don't have to go through my advice and follow your original writing style. Let me put this out real quick, you're talented, and your writing style is amazing! But you can garner more readers with that talent by finding the balance. That's all for my review. I'm adding this to my library because it's a good reference novel. (Yes, I love your descriptions :) )