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Deb_Nath_6301Lv12yrDeb_Nath_6301

The book was doing so well with the character development and everything but the recent chapters aren't good in comparison to how the book started. When Resh got his memory back, the change in character was too abrupt but understandable. But what is this sudden realisation and system messages of starting a new life. This is ridiculous. If you wanted to change the thought process of the character just do so with logic and good plot. But don't just bring those cliches of system giving them a notification about some random skills to start a new life. And change in mentality doesn't happen just because of few random system notifications. Seriously? I was expecting a lot from you, since I liked the book was progressing but seeing how the mc is behaving.... And the recent blunder of sleeping on a gryphon knowing very well that the humans were riding it a moment ago. Our very human mc goes straight on top of that animal without any regard for his tiny self that can be obliterated with a single scratch of the animal. Okay, I can understand that this is a mythical creature so he got excited and all and can somewhat be understandable. But that wasn't all the mc did. He fn slept on the creature. When I read it, it sounded so ridiculous. I moment I read it I knew where this story was going. He will be found by the humans who rode the gryphons, and some new story will start. :) . Even his earlier not so aware slime self which didn't have much brain power could process what should be done and what will bring danger. I just can't get it what the writer is thinking making such abrupt change in character and such disregard for life. 99% of the recent chapters are about him contemplating life and talking about this is gross or that is gross and about skill descriptions. I had so high expectations when I first started, now I am just disappointed.

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Keval_Shah_AudioAuthorKeval_Shah_Audio

thank you, I have received similar comments, all I can say is that this is my first time writing and first draft so some things might not make sense or might progress in unrealistic way, this will be smoothed out in second drafts etc. for now I will continue to write and fix those issues later! thanks so much for reading this much and being so invested in the story!

Deb_Nath_6301
Deb_Nath_6301Lv1Deb_Nath_6301

I was really invested, so I hope things get fixed. I ll surely come back to it since I like the the leveling and growth of our slimey mc. Keep improving

Keval_Shah_Audio:thank you, I have received similar comments, all I can say is that this is my first time writing and first draft so some things might not make sense or might progress in unrealistic way, this will be smoothed out in second drafts etc. for now I will continue to write and fix those issues later! thanks so much for reading this much and being so invested in the story!
Keval_Shah_Audio
Keval_Shah_AudioAuthorKeval_Shah_Audio

I hope you are enjoying the story more now if you are still reading! The transition hopefully is smoothed out and back to the good story you started with!

Deb_Nath_6301:I was really invested, so I hope things get fixed. I ll surely come back to it since I like the the leveling and growth of our slimey mc. Keep improving