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Thank you for your honest review, I really appreciate it. Although I agree that the story is a little bit fast-paced as this is my first novel, I disagree with the other things. As you've said characters act like cowards, that only happens when they find out the power of MC, before that they don't. Anyone with their life on the line would act that way when they know what kind of a monster he is. The world background is a little underdeveloped but I intend to reveal more as I go. And about the sis-con fetish, I never knew caring for your sister and family is considered as that, He never thinks about anything except his goals and how he can protect his family. There is never a dialogue in his head that shows that he is a sis-con. On the contrary, the sister is more like a bro-con, as she frequently tries to mess with him and goes to his room. But I don't intend to make the mc romantic in any way until way later, He only focuses on his goals and how he can understand his powers better. As a novice writer, I am trying my best to tell a story that could resonate with people, I don't know if it's good or bad, but I will write anyway. Because I think if I don't write I will never improve. I started this novel to express my fantasies and imagination in words, I am struggling with that, but I firmly believe that I can increase my writing skills if I push forward. People's choices often don't equate to others, as my stories won't please everyone, and that is fine. I feel really honored if anyone likes my stories, even if it is subpar. I really like people who have a different opinion than me, and point things out, so I can improve the things I lack and better my craft. Thank you for your criticism.

Yeah and I guess people would act like that. Just feel like sometimes common sense were not really in place in the people. Like when every monster in a red zone is gone I would probably be very cautious of the people staying there. But I suppose some people arent very cautious and maybe im weird. And also yeah he’s not much of a sis con just something to do with my own personal biases. And yeah I agree you should continue writing, your writing skills are pretty good and your vocab is diverse and you’re overall a pretty good author. Just think that the interactions between the family when he first came back was a little bit lacking in actual suspicion and they just embraced whatever he said. But yeah other than that and a bit face pacing, its a pretty good read.

Yeah, I also feel that was a bit unrealistic. I wrote the first five chapters on a whim, I didn't outline the story then. I never expected such a response, so I had to figure out where to take the story. I am trying to slow down the pace a bit and add more details to the story. I hope it turns out well. *fingers crossed*