Good job by our dear mate. Keep writing , keep progressing. We are always there for you.Do more and more progress. Detailed things are here , easy to make films through details😂. We need to find the secret to end the darkness of the world. Not only in the novel there is both good energy and dark energy which are around us . We need to identify them not for gaining power but to protect and improve the lives of everyone. Nice start by our dear mate. All the best to you.lots of love Dear Rajib.

REVIEW Narration: Decent and immersive Worldbuilding: Vast and detailed Character development: Nice and steady Character design: Outstanding Dialogues: Realistic and Lifelike Pacing: Not fast nor too slow Writing quality: Magnificent Execution of the Genre: Good pitch Story potential: High Updating Stability: Steady MESSAGE I am deeply happy that the author joined spirity. As it has the potential to win! With more exposure, this will become great and even reach a million views! Or anime adaptation even a movie! Kudos on your work and See you in December (if you know what I mean) 😉 Nice Synopsis! I am hooked! Definitely will add this and read for more!

I have to say, as a massive fan of the Zelda video games I absolutely loved this! Gave me serious Breath of the Wild vibes. Loved the idea of goblins and creatures suddenly appearing from all over the world, and temples which have to be cleared to level up and progress - straight out of an RPG game. The fight scenes as the protagonist battles his way through small hordes of goblins are all great, as diverse as can be in various sword tactics and very well-written. I liked how the protagonist has developed from a meek child and is transforming himself into the hero of the piece as he discovers he has a natural ability to defeat the goblins and is growing in strength the more enemies he defeats. Really great stuff so far. This story has a really pacy opening and has limitless potential to go very far. Highly recommend giving this a go.

Its alright for your first attempt. Keep it up for I liked it. Just don't drop it. Be stable. I think you lack the ability to explain an event pretty clearly and in a stable way. But I think you can improve it after some period. I think that you don't make grammatical mistakes and your writing is alright.

I really like the starting of the novel and the plot. I also like the pace of the novel with the slows and fasts. It is really a great one buddy! Fighting and will be waiting for the updates. Last but not least, really admire about being able to write systems and stuffs as I am really bad with it and calculations. Haha. Anyway, good luck for the contest too!

A good start. I liked the plot. The pacing was slow and fast at times. I wish it was a little more steady. The grammar could use some work and mc seems kind of shallow. I mean, one para, he's excited, the next para he's startled and the next para he's shaking from fear. I wouldn't have complained about this if this wasn't the first chapter. I personally think this needs an edit. But overall, it was a good story.

For some reason I was not expecting a system to appear, but, let's see how It will turn out, the story itself is very well written and has a fast pace.

I love what's happening with this novel It sorta gives off the Solo Leveling vibe in some small places but totally unique. World was built up greatly and everything was fleshed out wonderfully. Good work Author-San! XD

Impressive original novel! 👍 Writing quality - Excellent and vivid descriptions. I was really hooked up to this because of the vivid descriptions and unique plot story. Though I noticed typos error, it didn't affect the story. Hoping to find more updates :) kudos to you author!