Review Detail of borqueh in My Slaughter System
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What can I tell you, author? The story at first is pretty good. The only thing that bothers me is the way you rushed things. As soon as the MC wakes up, he runs through the forest, after running through the forest he meets the road where he gets on the bus that takes him back to the orphanage where the children who intimidate him kill him, why would you go back to the same place where they killed you? unanswered. After arriving at the orphanage, the MC is thrown to a military school in minutes where he is registered and it does not take long before he finds an arrogant boy whom the MC is going to kill in a few more chapters, or even go so far as to say that in the next chapter. In short, author, do not rush the story. Things are going too fast. Not even five chapters passed before the MC who is a cowardly boy turned into a cruel one. Yes, two months passed within the world of history, but for the MC and for us it was a matter of seconds.
My Slaughter System
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From what you wrote, I agree, It's a little bit rushed in the forest past. As for why he went back to the orphanage instead of going somewhere else, he still considers that his home and was unaware of the 'time-skip'. Also, a wrongful impression you might have, the MC wasn't actually 'killed' in the orphanage but at the school, which is why he didn't go back there. If he did I would definitely add more exposition. But you're right, In the future chapters, It won't be as rushed as it was in the 4th, I can assure you that. Thanks for the constructive feedback, I really appreciate it!