Review Detail of Omnitheus in Scarlette Overland

It's my second time reviewing it after reading through 23 Chaps :) Good improvement with the writing quality. Most lapses have been cleared which improved the readability. Reason why I don't binge-read it is because updates are quite slow the past days. I understand the author needed to clean up and edit the pats chaps so that's good enough and am sure can bounce back to more stable updates. Story development was a little slow-paced at the start but it became thrilling in the middle part around Chap 12. That's where most actions happen. I noticed the flashback with the other character was for the purpose of narration. I would recommend though to introduce flashbacks only when the story plot requires it so the reveal would have a stronger impact. World BG so far is so good. Author is able to connect the broad fantasy world. That's challenging following a monarch style world. Keep it up!