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2023-03-28 08:18

Love the stories direction, but just starting the story and may edit my review later on. Having said that, there are a couple of things that stand out to me: Writing quality: Seems to be well written but lacks flow. Good vocabulary though. Story development: So far so good. Character design: Suffers most from "telling and not showing". So far, instead of showing us through dialogue and character interactions, it just tells us. World background: Similar issues. All that said, love the premises and will keep reading to see how the author improves.

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