Review Detail of SmileUpon in Starting My New Life as a Lich (Hiatus)

This is my first original in and I have a hard time thinking of my story, there are many wrong typos and grammar for sure, I don`t mind being corrected, in fact I would love to know your comments to make Sauron`s journey much more better, I want to continue writing this story, and I think few of you would love this story also, so in advance thank you for those who will vote and those who will comment. (good or bad comment)