Okay so... I need to read more but so far it is a very rough story. I'm two chapters in and there are already a ridiculous amount issues. Grammer for one, using male pronouns instead of female and confusing the reader is a big one. There are also already some plot issues I see on the horizon. Honestly, I think that the premise is good but it just needs more work and thought. Could also use someone to go through and help with grammar. I will try to continue and may update the review if there is any improvement in quality, character depth, or flow vs forced plot.
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