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2021-07-01 03:58

The author has a lot of potential and the intro was intriguing, but they lack suitable expression which makes reading their story rather tricky. The inconsistent punctuation, spelling and strange use of language also makes the novel a particularly tumultuous read. I hope the author is able to amend these issues and once they have I know for sure that the story will be packed full of potential and great ideas! Good luck :)

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