The story has potential. It has an interesting premise. It flows nicely, well-written, and the story is progressing well. The only problem I think is that the wall of paragraph in the beginning. Don't worry, it will lessen... a bit. It might put off others with the chunk of text while others will enjoy the story despite the format. Goodluck to the author!
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