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saintbear
saintbearLv13yr
2021-04-14 23:43

I love this, I really do. You do a goodd job of making a world not like our own. It's phenomenal. One thing though: with the cover try usinga dark font that stands out, once you find that lemme know. Overall, This feels like potential.

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saintbear
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Also, with dialogue split up the paragraphs, it makes interaction feel spaced out like people are listening to eachother and it hooks readers.

Author_Enigwe
Author_EnigweAuthor

thanks very much. I will try giving them space and I already planned on changing the cover to something eye catching

saintbear
saintbearLv1

The face of the guy is eye catching but I would suggest switching the clor of his eyes to match whatever other secondary color you choose,

Author_Enigwe:thanks very much. I will try giving them space and I already planned on changing the cover to something eye catching
Author_Enigwe
Author_EnigweAuthor

I will do that. have just been really occupied

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