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Kinda cringey. Many unneeded scene. Author seemed to want to parade many powerful figures even at the very beginning...when mc is literally just reborn and powerless. Need to work on story progression/ rationale more. And mc didn't feel like an introvert down-on-his-luck pharmacist. Not in his bearing, or thinking, or even speech pattern. He seemed more like one of those teenage hikikomori...
Marvels SuperMutant
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Eh when first writing a novel its normal to poorly execute your ideas into making a good story, now you just have to keep practicing, though word of advice if you decide to keep writing for a long time, dont continuously drop novels, your credibility will drop like a rock in a lake
shawn_anderson:I changed the beginning chapter 4. The original is gone as are most of the big characters. As far as the the MCs introverted attitude, that was fixed in chapter 3 when the God changed him. Perhaps my wording or something messed that up. I do apologize.
I am going to finish this. I don't care how long it takes. I hope to get better as I go. This will be something I look back on to show myself where I came from if I write another book after this. I was thinking an HP fic
Magnowa:Eh when first writing a novel its normal to poorly execute your ideas into making a good story, now you just have to keep practicing, though word of advice if you decide to keep writing for a long time, dont continuously drop novels, your credibility will drop like a rock in a lake