Review Detail of SageOfSins in GOTO V.0
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It is bit too rushed and your narrative of the world lacks realistic feeling and certain flavors. While, I commend you on a good (well subpar, but honestly on this site it is good as 4 star Fic with those trash fics littering the app.) fic, I think you need to proof read your works and do some editing for both grammar and writing structures, based on your numerous incorrect usage of Upper form of letter instead of lower form.
GOTO V.0
God_Of_Brutality
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I did try to read the story, but I'm to be honest the narrative descriptions of action and appearances are in narcissistic tone, totally not my preference... And most of all if you can't even decide an accurate name for the MC, then I mourne for the descendants of Shakespeare and JR Tolkiens. In the first chapter the Officer address the MC as 'Adriel' than oon the next chapter the name has suddenly change 'Arias'.
MagnuS:We fixed it did u read?
I think it's a typo the author is a fast typer and he rewrote his novel give him some slack will ya. But what do you mean by "narcissistic tone"?
SageOfSins:I did try to read the story, but I'm to be honest the narrative descriptions of action and appearances are in narcissistic tone, totally not my preference... And most of all if you can't even decide an accurate name for the MC, then I mourne for the descendants of Shakespeare and JR Tolkiens. In the first chapter the Officer address the MC as 'Adriel' than oon the next chapter the name has suddenly change 'Arias'.