This story rocks I just can't get enough of it I'm sure the next chapters will be just as good so this story is a 5 star for me and I'm sure others will agree as well

i am very much enjoying this fic great work author .....................................................................................................................................................................

It is a good start for a fanfic. This is webnovel so beyond the obvious errors in grammar there is an issue with dialogue and Capitalization. The character seems cut and dry but its early so if he changes i will delete this part. The author has a good grasp of RWBY but misses some aspects of captain america- steve rogers. All in all a C+ fanfic

Quite well done. Firm basis for most events that take place happen without going into too much BS of "this happens just because I want it too as I write it". Overall transitions are also good between time skips of you get what is going on and not dragged out. Also always looking forward to when new chapters are out. 👏

Amazing start, and I can already see this story becoming an amzing story, just like the ones before. [img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend]

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Reveal spoiler

Bland and tasteless characters. The characterization was really off: all the personalities were presented wrong. The grammar is terrible, sometimes there are sentences that make no sense. The author transformed the girls into thirsty third rate vixens. Jaune's personality is all over the place.

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