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2021-04-29 12:12

This is a fun read! I really like the dedication of the author who writes all of these chapters. He even have the time to make a manga cover that looks perfectly like an anime that just have their adaptation. from a light novel.

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WinterTimeCrime
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Thanks for your review! Hope to see you again soon!

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Mako_Mako
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OK. So my review may be a bit biased since this is the only book I come to this site to read, HOWEVER I had to make a second review due to my love for the world Winter creates growing stronger and stronger with each page. Writing Quality: There may be a few errors here and there, however, when it comes to wordplay she can't be beat! I love the way she uses different sound effects and examples so her words cannot only be visualized, but also felt, smelt, and heard. Story Development: AAAH. ITS AMAZING! Like, it's so interesting how you THINK something will happen but it doesn't turn out that way. Like at first I thought.. "Ok, so she's going to go on an adventure to get her powers or something" WRONG. "Is *bleep* going to meet *bleep* and form some type of team to defeat *bleep* WRONG. Not only that, but the plot unfolds vividly and the world grows bigger as more questions emerge. Character Design: EVERY. SINGLE. CHARACTER. IS. DIFFERENT. Personality, clothes, hair, likes and dislikes, you get them all! she points pictures of how characters look from their eyes to their shoes. The way she explains how the people are feeling without actually saying what they're feeling is like genius. You'll literally fall in love or get interested with one or many of the characters in this book, I guarantee it. Updating Stability: At first it was fine... But she kinda stopped, she explained in the disc that she was doing uni stuff but she's started to pick it up again. I hope she continues with the usual 1-2 chaps with bonus chaps via powerstones. World Background: OK, NOW IF YOU SKIPPED EVERYTHING ELSE, READ THIS!!! The world building alone, is probably the best reason to read this book. why? She does an exciting job at creating multiple stories within one story. Everyone came from somewhere, things happen for specific reasons, nothing gets left-out, and they're specifics that get explained in detail. Even the magic in the book just didn't come out of nowhere, it came from *bleeeeeeeep* like that's so freaking creative! Conclusion: This book, honestly could be split into like several as all of the characters are intriguing and could go off on their own adventures and it would still be interesting. Her action scenes are vivid, she enters comedy for relief, a bit of romance all with a lot of blood and gore that catches my eye and makes me gag! If you want a story that's DEFINETLY going to be made into an anime or manga one day, start reading now so you can say that you were one of the first to enjoy this incredible adventure. p.s. My favorite character is Saori because I feel sad that she became *bleep* after her *bleep* died and she's so loveable! (she's the pink-haired girl in the book cover).

JayBird_TellEm
JayBird_TellEmLv1

I came from his previous works such as Lady of Labelle and Queen of Queens on Medium and Novella. To say the very least, they haven't lost his touch. - Writing Quality: Very elegant imagery. As a person who's very keen on surroundings and location while reading a story (think J.R.R. Tolkien), I like this author because they're precise about what's going around the characters. I enjoyed reading about the "manga sword" in C2, it was weird but I could see it vividly. Story Development - It seems we're only at the part where characters are being introduced and the setting is being described. Hard to say where this will lead, however, I feel someone or something is going to do a 360. Character Design - Hard to say so far, but they have me intrigued with characters like Momoko (pervertedness and shyness) and Obara (seems like a jokester). If this is truly Isekai, I wonder how they'll shape the story in the next world. I like how Momoko's perception and thoughts are laid out for the reader to interpret. Knowing the author, it starts off quite linear however they add some type of weird twist on the protagonist that's unusual. Momoko seems a bit pervy so who knows. World Background (I'm guessing this means location?) - The synopsis says she's average so when she's describing the world around her it all seems a bit lackluster, it may just be me. The protag is apparently going to an entirely new world so maybe his pictorial story-telling is used better there (and honestly in a new place like a town the reader needs a good description of what it looks like anyway). It's to soon to tell. All in all, great start, need more, good luck!

NakedApron
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Very strong start! Writing quality - epic. Story Development - I only saw two chaps and they were mostly setup chaps, so I can't say much! World Background - Patiently awaiting the Grand Appearance of Truck-kun! Actually, wait. She's prob just gonna whoosh through a portal with the two boys and maybe her sister. Character Design - I have a few problems here and they also tie into the storytelling aspect. But these are mostly just personal preferences so please don't take me too srsly. The way you write the details of the story are lit. The smells, the sounds, the sights, and the feelings. Most stories tend to only focus on feelings and sight, so I'm super impressed. But I found myself wanting to skim past these descriptions, because from the first six paragraphs of the story, you told me that the MC is just an averagely interesting person. So when I see her describing stuff, especially everyday stuff like how her apartment looks like and what she does daily, I just automatically think they're going to be something mundane. And I read the paragraphs fully and sure enough, they're mundane stuff. She talks about how her home looks, a rather small apartment complex for students; she mentions her parents and gets back to diligently praising her sister; then she talks about going to shop once a month... And at this point, you start to lose me. But after that, she starts to chat with her sister, which let's get honest here, is the best part about the story so far, so I get interested again. But, when they separate at school and MC starts to think about the average things, you start to lose me again with her average girl perspective. But then you redeem it by adding that epic description of the manga volumes shaped like a sword. It was a bit hard to visualize, but it was veeery, very interesting. For me, unique stuff like these are much more interesting to read, compared to a beautiful description of a scenery or whatever. Okay, I think you get my point. But how do you fix this? Me, personally, I'd add a twist to her average persona. Here's an example. "I'm just an average schoolgirl with average looks and average charisma, but my hobby is to trap and kill rats." And then I'd describe her doing average stuff, but doing her best to avoid the rat traps she placed all around her house, and her sister going like, "Momoko! Stop putting rat traps all over the place!" When they're walking towards their school, I'd maybe describe her glancing around the surroundings, wondering where she would find a rat to trap and kill. At this point, the reader will prob go wtf. But they'll still diligently read these descriptions of her everyday life, trying to understand what's going on. She said she's an average girl, but what kind of average girl goes around killing rats? Is she psycho? Or is it normal to have a hobby of killing rats in this world, considering how her sister seemed to take it so casually? Obviously, this is a super hyperbolic example. And you actually have this kind of twist where the MC loves manga and novels. But let's be honest. Everyone on this website loves manga and light novels. Her loving these things is not a unique trait for your intended readers. Okay, I went on too big of a tangent here. Basically, I just want you to make your MC more notable, I guess. But of course, please don't take me too seriously, as this is all my personal opinions.

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