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ahmed_tanim
ahmed_tanimLv18mthahmed_tanim

I wont deny, i enjoyed book.. it is one of the very few system based novels that i like, but unfortunately there are two huge loopholes in the plot in recent chapters. that turned my mood sour. 1. about khrom and rayna: khrom was incredibly guilty after he misjudged his wife and killed he, but suddenly he started new married life, just after a few months.. how does that make sense?? i would have no complaints if his wife was killed by others, then the story makes sense.. but when aythor added that he misjudged his wife, killed her and incredibly guilty for his action, romantic development with rayna doesn't make sense. 2. this one is way more fatal than previous one. both siblings seldom remember their parents. okay, even if i understand that they are worried inside, but dont have the power to do anything, thats why they are just waiting.. thats also good. but suddenly mc went on a business trip, he didnt think that his parents can come back in mean time. okay they were aboyt to come back in some days, so that does not matter. most importantly, after accidentally arriving into anothet empire, why are they settling down. instead of going back.???? why did her sister said nothing when mc proposed to start a shop in the capital?? if author notice my review, i would be grateful if you are kind enough to give me a proper explanation. or please correct these two loopholes, such obvious loopholes hurt my head. anyway, you rock, thank you for writing such an amazing book. please dont make it trash in later stages, or i will cry.. for me this is a master piece

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Eternal_Demon
Eternal_DemonAuthorEternal_Demon

It's not.

its_L:is it harem?
ahmed_tanim
ahmed_tanimLv1ahmed_tanim

there was a reply by author.. i dont know how it vanished.. whatever 1. my question was not about khrom's lovelife. it was about the intense guilt that author drew, how can that much guilt vanish away 2. i asked why he suddenly decided to settle down in the empire and his sister made no comment about it. these were my actual question

Eternal_Demon
Eternal_DemonAuthorEternal_Demon

Who said they won't go? They are just trying to change according to the situation for the time being. The Magic Association is in another region of the continent while they are in the central region, it will take months if not years to go back. And yet they don't know what they will do after going there. Furthermore, the vampires are after Cecelia, and they have seen Kadyn when he saved escaped with her. They are definitely searching for him right now in the Magic Alliance. As for their parents... well, you will know about it later. Second question: I didn't understand it clearly, but I think you want to ask why did he give up on revenge and he still feels guilt, but he can't always cry in front of everyone, can he? Right now he is far too weak to confront his enemy who was behind all his misery. So he is just buying time to reach that level before getting his revenge. Thank you for reading!

ahmed_tanim:there was a reply by author.. i dont know how it vanished.. whatever 1. my question was not about khrom's lovelife. it was about the intense guilt that author drew, how can that much guilt vanish away 2. i asked why he suddenly decided to settle down in the empire and his sister made no comment about it. these were my actual question
ahmed_tanim
ahmed_tanimLv1ahmed_tanim

thank you

Eternal_Demon:Who said they won't go? They are just trying to change according to the situation for the time being. The Magic Association is in another region of the continent while they are in the central region, it will take months if not years to go back. And yet they don't know what they will do after going there. Furthermore, the vampires are after Cecelia, and they have seen Kadyn when he saved escaped with her. They are definitely searching for him right now in the Magic Alliance. As for their parents... well, you will know about it later. Second question: I didn't understand it clearly, but I think you want to ask why did he give up on revenge and he still feels guilt, but he can't always cry in front of everyone, can he? Right now he is far too weak to confront his enemy who was behind all his misery. So he is just buying time to reach that level before getting his revenge. Thank you for reading!
ahmed_tanim
ahmed_tanimLv1ahmed_tanim

no no, i didn't ask about him giving up on his revenge. it was just. he used to love a woman, he killed that woman because of misunderstanding and he felt guilty because of that. it was khrom's initial character. my question was, how can he move on from that guilt of killing his wife and start a new life with another woman? normally a person would think in his situation, 'I am guilty and I dont deserve a happy life.' a person ought to live in pain in the memory of his dead wife. even if he moves on, it will take years. but here the thing was different. khrom was crying in rage and guilt for killing her wife.. after few days he is flirting with rayna. this does not add up. if it were years later, it would have been prety good

Eternal_Demon:Who said they won't go? They are just trying to change according to the situation for the time being. The Magic Association is in another region of the continent while they are in the central region, it will take months if not years to go back. And yet they don't know what they will do after going there. Furthermore, the vampires are after Cecelia, and they have seen Kadyn when he saved escaped with her. They are definitely searching for him right now in the Magic Alliance. As for their parents... well, you will know about it later. Second question: I didn't understand it clearly, but I think you want to ask why did he give up on revenge and he still feels guilt, but he can't always cry in front of everyone, can he? Right now he is far too weak to confront his enemy who was behind all his misery. So he is just buying time to reach that level before getting his revenge. Thank you for reading!
Eternal_Demon
Eternal_DemonAuthorEternal_Demon

It's been months already. Time heals everything, but yeah, you are right, I will try to explain it in the later chapters.

ahmed_tanim:no no, i didn't ask about him giving up on his revenge. it was just. he used to love a woman, he killed that woman because of misunderstanding and he felt guilty because of that. it was khrom's initial character. my question was, how can he move on from that guilt of killing his wife and start a new life with another woman? normally a person would think in his situation, 'I am guilty and I dont deserve a happy life.' a person ought to live in pain in the memory of his dead wife. even if he moves on, it will take years. but here the thing was different. khrom was crying in rage and guilt for killing her wife.. after few days he is flirting with rayna. this does not add up. if it were years later, it would have been prety good
ahmed_tanim
ahmed_tanimLv1ahmed_tanim

time heals sadness, but for guilt to heal the time was really too short. and thank you for your kind replies. please dont be irritated with me..as i am only bothering yoi because i think this book has enough potential to be one of the best. i am really in love with this. and another request please dont drop it. i want to continue reading this. and if possible dont make it a harem. lots of love and respect for your hard work.

Eternal_Demon:It's been months already. Time heals everything, but yeah, you are right, I will try to explain it in the later chapters.
Eternal_Demon
Eternal_DemonAuthorEternal_Demon

Thanks for the support and love...:)

ahmed_tanim:time heals sadness, but for guilt to heal the time was really too short. and thank you for your kind replies. please dont be irritated with me..as i am only bothering yoi because i think this book has enough potential to be one of the best. i am really in love with this. and another request please dont drop it. i want to continue reading this. and if possible dont make it a harem. lots of love and respect for your hard work.
its_L
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is it harem?

Eternal_Demon:Thanks for the support and love...:)