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2023-06-01 10:40

Let me preface this by stating that I was initially obsessed with this novel. I paid for full privilege multiple times (which was 1,500 coins more or less). Unfortunately, the story just kind of fizzled towards the end. I’m a sucker for rebirth novels that center around not falling in love with the terrible male lead in their second life. It’s my kryptonite. I was invested in the plot from day one. As the novel progressed, I felt that the pacing was a bit slow. I didn’t comment on it or anything because I figured the author was in it for the long haul. I gave it a chance. I’ve read stories with a thousand plus chapters, so if the author planned to write for that long, then the pacing wasn’t an issue. As time went on however, the story just kept going in circles. It was always shrouded in mystery and it offered more mysteries than resolutions. It also introduced a lot of characters, yet only focused on some while ignoring others that seemed more important. An example of this is introducing all of He Jian’s friends but heavily focusing on only Liu Ji Fan (and his love interest Tian Yuan). Not only did I not enjoy spending a lot of time on his character, I also did not like him at all. He was an overbearing abusive CEO type of lover and I felt like Tian Yuan was just abused. It seemed that he was sexually forceful with him and basically had him caged. I did not care for him and his persona at all. It also didn’t benefit the plot at all. You could literally remove his character completely and the story would be better for it because it wouldn’t have any useless filler. Then I saw that the author created a new story. This was around the 500s in this novel. The lack of attention and dedication in this story was reflected in their slow updates. Especially since the other novel was more successful. The other novel ended and while the author was gracious enough to decide to finish this novel, they did not give it the proper send off that this novel deserved. In roughly 100 chapters, the author tried to wrap up all the story lines. That means all the mysteries were going to be unearthed and all the characters that were foreshadowed to be important would make their moves in just a few chapters. Personally, it feels like the ending focused too much on drama that separated the two lovers over and over again instead of just giving us closure and character growth. We’ve read hundreds of chapters of Mo Roulan suffering. Can she not catch a break? Can we not get some sweet moments? Literally the last chapter is them agreeing to giving it another shot. It has three side chapters. I was holding out hope that it could be redeemed, but two of them tell you all of the past while only the last gives you a glimpse into their happy future. If you want to read the entire novel in just three chapters, you can just read the side stories. It’s everything you need to know. I would have preferred it if He Jian recovered his first life’s memories earlier on, and they communicated with each other much earlier on. That way they could’ve both healed together and we could’ve gotten to see them mature as people and as a couple. It would’ve been nice to also see the mom’s family and to have seen her be happy. The mom had such a tragic life yet we didn’t get to see her live the happiness she deserved with Chi Rong. I also would’ve liked some kind of retribution towards He Jian’s friends for how they treated Mo Roulan during her first life. Now that I think about friends, it would’ve been great if Roulan had friends, but I digress. I hope if the author reads this they can handle my constructive criticism and focus on improving their future stories. It’s upsetting as a reader when you spend all of your time and money devoted to a story only to have such an unsatisfying ending. I have nothing against you as a writer. I hope you continue to create and improve, and wish you success!

CEO He : Please Don't Love Me

Ada_5253

4.3

666 Chs