Review Detail of Harbinger9901 in Minecraft Survival: ASOIAF

The novel has potential but it is just unreadable. The author writes it as if YOU are the main character when you clearly aren’t. He tries to write is as the Mc is the focus of the story but he just keep typing as if YOU are. Im just going to wait till someone else makes a better version of this novel because lets be honest everyone does it one way or another. Below is not from the novel but this is pretty much how the author writes. “After you go to your bed you just remember something important causing you to get back up.” I dont understand why the author keeps writing like this when it should be written like this. Luke will be a random name for a MC. “After Luke went to his bed he suddenly remembered that he forgot to do something important. Now realizing this, Luke got back up and proceeded to do it.” This was just what came to my mind and i know their are some grammar mistakes. Im pretty disappointed because the Author had a good idea but he just does not know how to write correctly. I can read novels with poor grammar but this is just to wrong? I cant even describe it.