Review Detail of raeoflight1985 in Vengeance of the Fallen Magus
Review detail
This story has no consistency the story jumps all over the place even within the first couple chapters... if the author wants to improve his story he needs to make it flow I mean the guy comes back from his future but still has to learn how to do basic magic (if he was acting like he was learning would at least be understandable but there is no sign of that). For example it makes it seem like He is working with Lein in his room on studies and suddenly she gets assaulted by some random guy... there is either a disconnect of info or its just bad writing.
Vengeance of the Fallen Magus
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apologizes for the turn off. I'm still trying my best to write that in a flow. Of course, this is the first time I become a writer. So apologizes for those dumb blunders. I will opt in rewriting once I have enough funding on it. I mean, I could do all of those, but it will burn myself out too much If I had to do both rewriting and releasing. again, thank you for the visit. It's really a honor to know that there is a feedback to know at last :D