Review Detail of Zavier_Ryan in The Phisloke Evolution
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Ehh the hook is decent but at the same time not really i recommend rewriting the beginning chapters to have a better hook and make it so theres a challenge to improve himself instead of plot armor
The Phisloke Evolution
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I do plan on going back to readjust some of my beginning characters, that way more people would be interested in reading my novel. However, since you wrote a review, I'm willing to give you a shoutout in the book, such as a creature, weapon, person, or adversary he has to overcome. Divine cheese asked for sheep, and chaos swan asked for the Chaos Swan/ Rainbow Eggs, so those are some examples.
A then ill probably wait till to you end up rewriting the chapters to start reading again also the cringy way he talks in the beginning and how he an overly goody toeshoes as well is kinda a turn off for me atleast not sure about others
Arctic_Hourglass:I do plan on going back to readjust some of my beginning characters, that way more people would be interested in reading my novel. However, since you wrote a review, I'm willing to give you a shoutout in the book, such as a creature, weapon, person, or adversary he has to overcome. Divine cheese asked for sheep, and chaos swan asked for the Chaos Swan/ Rainbow Eggs, so those are some examples.