First start with writing quality. it's clear, easy to read. sometimes it's more clear than its needs to be. overall I find it better than few of the contracted authors'. You get the clear idea of the tone of the story reading the first few chapters. And it's described well. The only problem that I could pick is the same I found myself most problem with-- show don't tell. there's good work in telling the back story but it would be great if you show their innermost feelings and physical reaction. overall it looks promising. Good Day writing....
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