Review Detail of midnight_bloom in Fate; Unlasting

All three chapters (as of this writing) are strong! Intense! The author has good storytelling skills that I found myself so engrossed while reading. I visualize it inside my head. However, sometimes, there's difficulty in phrasing which sometimes affect readability. It needs further polishing. There's also a tendency for run-on sentences. I already personally like the way of writing, but it can be improved with editing. 🙂 I would suggest apps like grammarly and hemmingway (hemmingwayapp.com). The latter gives more help in the structure. All the best, author. Your novel is awesome. I like it a lot. Keep on writing.