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koshi_
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2021-08-06 16:26

Adventurous and action scenes are something fascinates me the most and this is also the thing where I struggle the most while writing. However, the author has done a really great work here. Well designed characters, beautifully explained world background and a really cool writing style! what else we need? guys just go ahead and have a look. I love main character's cool attitude and her sense of humor. She is not like someone to cry over their misery, instead of crying she tends to adapt the new circumstances. Great work author 👍 My best wishes to you

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Aeipathy_02
Aeipathy_02Author

Thank you. All the best to your story too 🙏💕

Aeipathy_02
Aeipathy_02Author

Hi Koshi! May I ask for your support to vote for my new story Royal Survival just until Monday for the WPC?

koshi_
koshi_Lv4

Hi, sorry, like really sorry 🙏 I don't know how I didn't see this comment until today... I would have voted but I just didn't see it, I am so terrible! Sorry again! From next time, I'll definitely pay more attention to my notifications🙏🙏

Aeipathy_02:Hi Koshi! May I ask for your support to vote for my new story Royal Survival just until Monday for the WPC?
Aeipathy_02
Aeipathy_02Author

It's alright. No worries <3

koshi_:Hi, sorry, like really sorry 🙏 I don't know how I didn't see this comment until today... I would have voted but I just didn't see it, I am so terrible! Sorry again! From next time, I'll definitely pay more attention to my notifications🙏🙏
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Tangerqueen
TangerqueenLv2

I feel like I've read enough of this story to actually leave a detailed enough review, so attached is my not-so-initial opinion of this story. Writing Quality (5/5): I love how the author says that English is not her first author, but the writing is still very smooth to read and with little grammatical mistakes. I'm that type of reader to literally paragraph comment every little mistake I've observed, and honestly, I haven't had to do that here at all. There are variations in sentence patterns, showing and not telling, and really good descriptions that help me visualize the scene. Not to mention, I LOVE all the little extra scenes. They're literally soooo cute (and still help me understand the world/characters more). Stability of Updates (5/5) Story Development (5/5): It was honestly kind of surprising how there wasn't a single chapter that didn't have some form of action. It's what I expect of an adventure book but at the same time, one of the few books I found here that actually lives up to that expectation. Plus, at the same time, I don't really find it rushed, and everything happens at just the right pace. Character Design (5/5): Finally a "villainous" who doesn't try to somehow just become the FL of the story. Like bless, there's finally someone here with actually human reactions and logic??? Also, I really like the dynamics between Malaya and her family ^-^ The dialogue and the way they speak really give each of them some depth. World Background (5/5): It's definitely really clear that there was thought put into constructing this world. Special shoutout to all the magic levels. I read the glossary or the auxiliary chapters afterwards, and I was suddenly like omi this is geniusssss All in all a great read that lives up to it's name. There's no shady and forced romance, and Malaya really is the definition of rewriting your own future. I added the story to my library, and I think it's there to stay :D

Sun23
Sun23Lv3

I'll began with the author writing quality. I can say that it's good, there were sentences that I found a bit hard to understand, which I think can be fix by just rewording the sentences. Transition is good. As for grammar issues, I'm not really good either *cry cry, but I think that there were a few words that can be replace with a different word, I mean words that have the same definition, but just a different way of saying it. In regard to character design and story development, I'll think that the author did a great job on describing the characters. Especially, the villain, ahem, kind of make me think of those hot anime guy, hehe. Refocusing back to what I say about the describing the characters, yes, the author was good at trying to make her mysterious by wearing a hood. Makes me wonder how beautiful she is. As for her companion, it's a love and hate thing. I don't why, but I can't stand Dorris. Somehow, I imagine her as an annoying little girl. Author, why did you make me think of my little sister? Lol.....Moving on to the story background, the author has provide a glossary of her story world! Excellent! It may be a bit inconvenience to go back and forth when reading a part in the story that made you confuse where you have to go back and search for the meaning behind it, but hey, I'm not complaining. And finally, for story development and updates, the author did say in the synopsis that new chapters depend on the length of each arc. Which is good for eager reader to understand that they need to wait patiently. And last but not least, the story development. From the beginning to the latest chapter, the main action, or dream of the main character haven't happen yet, to be the best voyager! It look like the author is still building up to the point the main character sets on her journey. So as a last parting words of encouragement I wish the best for Malaya and the author herself. Great job, and keep up the great work!

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