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2021-04-15 19:42

This review breaks my heart more than I thought, as I have to be brutally honest. First of is the writing quality. I wouldn't say it was super bad, but there were too many to count grammatical errors that it was confusing to read. Plus the strange formatting and the sudden transitions of scenes. Although the flow is good and the narration can still make you grasp of what's going on, everything else is all over the place. It's hard to get past the initial chapters. Story development: (spoiler alert) First chapter is the younger days of our FL and ML. It revolves around the difference of both households, their teaching, and how beautiful innocence was despite their differences. However, at the end of the chapter, comes a bad news which would separate the two innocent children. I must say its a good hook. But, as I've said, the formatting and abrupt change of scenes made it hard to feel immersed in the story and really enjoy it. Still, I read the second chapter and I just had to stop midway. Overall, the only problem in this story was the abrupt transition of scenes and grammar. However, as a whole, I think the story is pretty cute. I'm sorry if my review sounds harsh but I really think this novel has potential. Just keep on writing, learning, and improving. Goodluck to the author and this novel!

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Thank you so much. I will keep the point pointed out and do accordingly 👍😇

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