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2021-04-12 13:02

I liked the story line and development. The grammar is good too. There are some points where I think that they can be better but other than that great job author. I was hooked by this story hehehe

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BerriApplepi
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Thank you for the review! Can you dm me the points so that I can try to improve it? 😊

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Nocturnal_Dreamer
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Wooosh! I didn't expect that bumpy ride or rollercoaster of emotions. The first chapter and the thing about the marriage caught me off guard! I just felt like giving a review while resting hehehe. Unlike most stories, the author smartly didn't focus on unnecessary details. Idk if it's just me but sometimes too much explanation about how things look is ruining the reading immersion. I know this is a common psychological romance novel but I'm seeing a lot of non-cliche things from this novel. The intriguing and intensely emotional 1st chapter will definitely pull you in. I like that there are no rape scenes here despite the story being dark. Keep it balanced author. I like how you played in the middle, not too dark but not too childish romance story as well. I am not aware of what kind of brain damage the MC has or whether that's real but it certainly showed its importance to the story right off the bat. But what I like the most is the author's visible talent when it comes to showing the characters' emotions. That's hard without actually saying it but the author made it look easy. Her vocabulary is nice too, I learned a few words here. The reading immersion is smooth. The transitions of points of view are smooth as well. There are few funky grammars sometimes but it's negligible and it wouldn't disrupt the reading immersion. I could imagine how many times the author proofread and edited the chapters to make them presentable and enjoyable. The author executed everything well but of course, no one is perfect. Kudos! Overall, it's a great read. It's worth a try reading this! Give it a chance! You will not regret it! I hope I provided a good review without spoiling everything hehehehe. Thanks for the effort making this Author. You did a splendid job. 🤗😊

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