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Idk how this got 5 star rating when at most it should get 4.2, just ur average boring fanfic, with some illogical things like the author "fox hunt". I have no idea why most authors don't even try to do some research before they start writing fanfic, u have easily available info about everything in Naruto. Sasuke had hard childhood, Naruto worse but not the worst in Narutos universe. This title should go to either Kakashi or Gaara, Gaara didn't had any protection in the village, villagers feared him and his father wanted to kill him multiple times. Kakashi's mother died either at his birth or very early in his life, he was the first one to discover his dad body after he committed suicide, he stabbed through the chest of his teammate which he swore to protect after Obito sacrificed himself for him, and his Sharingan will always remind him every failure that he did in his life.
In Naruto As....Well Naruto
Laziness_IsThe_Key
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Laziness_IsThe_Key:It's an AU like i have mentioned already. I wanted to make future revenge more reasonable
Unfortunate for u it's not a reasonable one, not once in any au would something like that happen, even if theoretically 3th was evil, he would be never so stupid to let something like that happen to jinchuriki, he would rather give him to Danzo, it's just not reasonable in any way after the destruction Konoha taken from 9tail to not have any last line of defense in case war
Laziness_IsThe_Key:It's an AU like i have mentioned already. I wanted to make future revenge more reasonable
Righteous_Serpent:Unfortunate for u it's not a reasonable one, not once in any au would something like that happen, even if theoretically 3th was evil, he would be never so stupid to let something like that happen to jinchuriki, he would rather give him to Danzo, it's just not reasonable in any way after the destruction Konoha taken from 9tail to not have any last line of defense in case war
Righteous_Serpent:You could just change the past to make such a plot meaningful.
So? I'm giving u a review if u were going to get only reviews like great job u will never improve and I'm only been pointing the logical mishaps and things that every writer should consider like research, u can get every information about Naruto from wiki's and other sites or simple things like thinking what would happen and how the story would progress if u changed some things, it's not some advanced things, just some basics that can be done easily even for someone that has zero knowledge about writing.
Laziness_IsThe_Key:Oh and i would like to remind you that this is my my first book