Review Detail of Fanactasy in Collided Worlds

Hello everybody! Passing here To talk a little about the first novel I'm writing and give a little help with a five-star rating! As I said earlier, this is my first novel. Probably the first chapters will be very weak and rubbish, taking into account that I have no experience and that English is not my native language. I hope you give my work a chance! My goal is always to improve, and I hope this will be visible in the course of the development of this story! I just started on my journey! Feel free to leave your opinion here or in the comments during the chapters! I don't expect much from this work, and I'm using it as a way to gain experience! Constructive criticism and praise are very welcome! I wish you all a great reading ~