Bravo author! You have me hooked! I absolutely adore how meticulous and precise each scene was, with detailed description, metaphors, and a good expression of the characters emotions. I am enjoying the concepts for this book a lot, how everything seems to be filled with a sense of foreboding, and how well the story unravels as you progress. The dialogue is varied and dynamic, and overall I had a great time reading this!

As a fellow fantasy writer, I can appreciate the care and attention that has been given to both the plot and the characters within. The dialogue is great, but most intriguing are the snapshots of brilliant description that draw me in. Compared to most other stories on here which have grammatical errors galore, this is a breezy read that does not require as much mental acrobatics to put together a picture. Bravo!

I really really really could not stress enough how good the sentences are from the story. The author fills the novel with metaphor and similies that greatly links with the dialogues. It kept me reading and wondering about the sentences one after the other! Good job, mate! It is a nice read, and I cant wait to read more of it!

Great job for the author that could immerse the readers right away. The first chapter could let you say,"Okay,what's next? I want to read more". The author's narration is enough for you to get immersed with the story, reading the rest of the chapters. The synopsis could instantly hooked you in. Give this book a read!

Great plot and excellent thought! Since I love fantasy, I liked it very much. Your sentence structure was great and story was easy to understand. Keep it up author! Your future is brightening!

Excellent diction and interesting sentence structure make this an intriguing read if you're into the fantasy genre. Being drawn into the author's world is quite a talent as I was able to visualize many of the things that were going on, scene for scene. However, it was hard for me to keep reading (and lead me to re-read passages) as I sometimes got confused as to who was talking. There was dialogue, but not enough action to convey or help me understand why they said what they said. Based on your reading, you've probably heard of "Show, Don't Tell," but maybe just a bit more showing for your readers to understand what your characters are trying to convey. Let your readers decipher who's talking based on the actions they take, Other than that, this was an awesome read! Can't wait for more!

I jumped into this with no expectations, and was greatly surprised honestly. It's a very intriguing start for the story, and I'm more than curious to read what happens next. Honestly, AMAZING job!!

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[After reading Chapter 8] Aside from the story and character design, what I really like about this novel is the diction. The choice of words. It's as if there are colors in the words used. They are rich and flavorful. Keep on writing, Author. Your novel will go a long way! :3

I've read all five chapters and it intrigued me what happens next? The writing style is well written. Very promising characters. The chapters are not too long which I liked the most. I liked how the author created the concept. Definitely recommended it for reading. Great work, Author!