There aren't a lot of chapters so I can't really decide too much yet (if it's ever needed, I'll be glad to reread and redo the review). The only thing that struck me as kind of weird was how everyone talked with perfect clarity? It was like... they were all super duper drunk and talking without any nervousness, just pure lucidity (i think it's lucidity) and I mean works well enough. They talk in a really oldish sounding way which is really cool in my opinion, and so OvO. Some people said that the pace was slow, but I'd say that the pace was alright, but only because there really isn't a lot of chapters and it was written well enough that what was happening wasn't clear with three chapters (some stories go fast enough that it's somewhat obvious what's going to happen). I would, however, make some sort of index for the names of the cities and places and stuff because (for people with horrible memory, like me) it might get confusing especially if the names are as long as Loranisburg. Or maybe it's just me who thinks that. I really like how the writing was sort of click click click writing, and it sounded more like halfway between a poem and a story - which is awesome. I would just be careful not to overdo that part because while it sounds absolutely awesome and gives a really vivid picture, it can also ruin a novel with too much. Similar to what happens when there are too many metaphors in one paragraph. It's really cool and I'm saving it (I remember OvOOOO). If anything changes or if there's anything else that I've noticed, I'll definitely write another review for it.
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