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rodrigo_melo
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2021-09-06 08:01

Man, i reat like 6 chapter and man, it's was awful, these first chapters are just so boring, is literally just MC's thoughs e his future plans, man when you're doing this kinda thing you have to show his plans slowly while we learn more about his personality so his actions can be justified, and you just rushed everything, is really boring when you are reading a game of thrones FF but the aspects or tone of the story is not there. That's why i thing the first 6 chapters are just awful and rushed, i'm not planning to stop tho, but if the the next 20 chapters are bad i'll drop it. English is not my first language but i'll give 5 stars for the writing quality , didn't find many mistakes.

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AmarHazlin
AmarHazlinLv4

soo..... how is it? I've been hesitating to read this book for a while now

rodrigo_melo
rodrigo_meloLv2

I though it was really boring and with a bad organized begnning, but i could get better later, i don't know, just try to read the first chapters and see if you like it.

AmarHazlin:soo..... how is it? I've been hesitating to read this book for a while now
EnderPL
EnderPLAuthor

True, the first chaps are terrible even for me. I think I'm doing better after. Thanks for the review.

Humbuub
HumbuubLv4

I agree. It really bums me out when the inner thoughts are so far from GOT Vibe. It's one of the most important detail, just because it's in GOT AU & it's an FF doesn't mean you could just write it like how your write any Isekai anime novels. I've recently dropped an FF where the MC talks like he's a character in anime with the surprise shock and stammering dialogues.

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Dannt_
Dannt_Lv2

En mi opinión, no me gusto este fanfic por varias cosas,primero... salvo a Elia... solo por que era sexy y tal vez le sentia lastima... si quiere alguirn sexy salva a Lyanna, es sexy, le daria muy buena relación con los stark y por ende con Robert, aunque robert es un idiota y probablemente este follando con putas mientras esta casado. Le dara poder a la casa del mc, le dara un fuerte aliado igual al norte. Y mas con todos los posibles espias o traidores que pueden vender información de el por oro, esto evitaria que sea facilmente destruido. Pero salvando a Elia aunque le daria un aliado con la casa martell, pero Robert seria el maldito rey y con su orden las otras casas los destruirian,y en primera fila saldrian la casa baratheon,Stark, Lannister(por que Tywin no se quedaria quieto viendo un posible enemigo económico y con gusto le prestaria sus abanderados al rey) y de paso otras casas que querrian ganar el favor del rey... la casa martell no se arriesgaria a ir contra casi todo westeros solo por una persona,asi que yo prefiero una amistad con los stark y los baratheon que con los martell. Es una estupidez que solo por que este sexy o por que es genial o por que no se tal vez le da pesar por todo lo que ha pasado... pero estamos en un puto mundo donde las traiciones, violaciones, torturas, muestres es algo común. Incluso en nuestro mundo, asi que no fue una desicion muy inteligente Y la parte de perder 12 soldados solo por salvarla... fue algo muy idiota, 12 soldados perdidos por una mujer que no le dara nada,solo problemas. Yo hubiera preferidos salvar a Lyanna le daria poderosos aliados a el y su casa. Los lannister no podrian atacarlos directamente asi que... esa fue una de las razones por las cuales deje este libro La segunda,fue la traición de uno de sus comandantes (creo que era asi) qie era un espia de su madre... lo dejo ir sin mas, yo por mi parte como gobernante pondria mano dura y mostraria a mi ejercito que la traición no es una opción... en mi poa experiencia en guerra, creo que seria lo mejor,por que si lo dejo ir asi sin mas los posibles traidores inconcientemente no te tendran miedo, para mi un gobernante debe ser bueno con su gente y malo con sus enemigos, inteligente y compasivo, pero tambien debe poner mano dura. Incluso si era un espia de su madre y lo traicionó asi, aunque tambien fue un idiota en pensar que la mayoria de sus hombres serian leales a el por unos pocos años, incluso no me extrañaria si hubieran espias en sus filas Asi que fue una de las razones por las cuales deje de leerlo, pues no le vi futuro al protagonista en lo idiota que fue. Claro es mi punto de vista y se que el fanfic es del autor y el puede hacer lo que le venga en gana con el... pero aun sigo pensando que es un idiota

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