Review Detail of A_lucid_Dreamer in Chronicles of Sprigladel: Tale of Two Tales
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This novel has great world building. But I think the writer could benefit from show instead of tell when it comes to personality of each character. The description of places and community we're good but after a while it becomes a info dump. Try to put in more breaks in your paragraphs so it doesn't just seem like am Mt. of information. This novel feels like a RPG storyline with how well the world is build and the different races. You have a pretty solid foundation here. I also get some D&D vibs
Chronicles of Sprigladel: Tale of Two Tales
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Thank you so much for the input! I appreciate that a lot. As for the breaks I actually went back and put more believe it or not lol, but since the chapters were already written I didn't want it to lose it's established pacing, and someone else mentioned it, and I took note, but it is good to know it seems to be a common critique. Starting the next chapter onward I will be using more paragraph breaks and possibly markers like ------ , _____, or ***** to separate stuff better down the line for readability, if you return for the later chapters, please do share any more critique I really do consider it!