Review Detail of Dontlookdown in The Case of Beta Marriage [BL]

While not a bad story, There are some issues. The biggest is that this world seems different from ours, but it is never really explained. Terms such as Omega and Beta are used as titles, but the meaning for them is never explained, nor is the distinction. I think the story could be improved if a bit more world building was done, instead of it reading like I should already know what the world is like. There is also an inconsistency with the MC. He is described as being heartless, but his actions don't follow that. Kind and goofy is what his actions portray him as, so fixing that would help. I'm not sure how to describe it, but the story also has an almost intangible feel to it. I have a hard time picturing the scene, and I believe that is due to a lack of description to the scenes. Slowing the pace down could help. I'm not trying to be rude, these are just the issues that I see. I hope you take this as constructive criticism, because that is what I'm striving to offer.