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Yuri_yuri
Yuri_yuriLv43yr
2021-04-02 01:08

1- the writing quality is poor 2- the first chapters nothing is understood about the plot and story 3- the story progresses too fast without a fixed goal 4- there are no different points of view of the different characters

The Animagus in DC ( Comics )

Kj18
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Kj18
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1- The translator doesn't help either so it is difficult, but thanks anyway. 2- I also agree with you that even I don't understand. 3-Yes, he has no goal he will do anything. 4-I am starting to change others' points of view. Thanks for your review I expect a loli or a Waifu at your door.

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Yuri_yuri
Yuri_yuriLv4

Not only is it the translator's fault, I use the translator because I don't know a lot of English ... but I speak more about the way of writing ... when the characters speak, you put ... Louis: long live Chayanne when should you put "Long live Chayanne" Louis suddenly yelled or something like that

Kj18:1- The translator doesn't help either so it is difficult, but thanks anyway. 2- I also agree with you that even I don't understand. 3-Yes, he has no goal he will do anything. 4-I am starting to change others' points of view. Thanks for your review I expect a loli or a Waifu at your door.
3yr
Yuri_yuri
Yuri_yuriLv4

I don't know how to explain it but don't put the name of a character whenever he talks is a very bad example ... person 1: how are you person 2: fine and you ... do not put the dialogues in this way make it more fluid that they are integrated into a paragraph

Yuri_yuri:Not only is it the translator's fault, I use the translator because I don't know a lot of English ... but I speak more about the way of writing ... when the characters speak, you put ... Louis: long live Chayanne when should you put "Long live Chayanne" Louis suddenly yelled or something like that
3yr
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Kj18
Kj18Author

Thank you my friend, I will try it in the next fanfic I am doing.

Yuri_yuri:I don't know how to explain it but don't put the name of a character whenever he talks is a very bad example ... person 1: how are you person 2: fine and you ... do not put the dialogues in this way make it more fluid that they are integrated into a paragraph
3yr
Yuri_yuri
Yuri_yuriLv4

Ta bien

Kj18:Thank you my friend, I will try it in the next fanfic I am doing.
3yr
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dope_is_my_name
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Pretty nice idea of story updates are Steady in a way but the dowside is that the writing is not up to par (no disrespect) but if you fix that everything should be fine

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Bookcultivater
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chapter 6 wasn't even in English and why do feel there's things happening for no reason? FIIIIIIILLLLLLLLLLLLLEEEEEEEEEEEEERRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRR

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Lord666Acedia
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Reveal spoiler

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amoeba12696260
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I can tell with absolute certainty the author either comes from a completely different country, 90% of its written like Google translate, or they’re about 6 years old

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Juwon_Oh
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All in all the update speed is pretty good. The major problems come from the writing style of the author. First major problems are the structure of the writing itself. The second problem is the use of the present tense makes the story feel awkward. The result is the author just dictating actions the mc takes, taking away any and all immersion. Over-all just an average novel on webnovel, with potential to be more if the author improves on his writing skills. I would recommend watching some videos on YouTube on writing stories.

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