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Twozero_8103Lv33yr
2021-05-25 01:03

this is a great book but it starts to get annoying when the mc switch from hiro to his son for no stated reason and it just happens out of the blue

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95_novel_maniac_95
95_novel_maniac_95Lv5

writing is good and easy to understand so 5✳️ story development and character development was good I have read 134 chapters... it becomes bland near the mha end arc...and it's not because mc had become op....it's because the interaction between character is becoming plain....for ex - around chapter 100 or something interaction with zeowtwo is mainly (darling , yes angle, you look beautiful or I love you ECT let's go to the bed) mostly end there. same with interaction with side character saw a kid with sad orphan type story , adopt him or her.... after that he will cook food or buy clothes and gift some power ,give some potion slap a experience card and tada the kid naw see them as their parents.... their is no depth or heart to heart talk or any quality conversation or emotions between mc and kid....and not even a simple conversation between zero two and the kids..... the importance or impression of zero two has changed from mfc to some side character that is mentioned time to time in novel.....her character is becoming bland and her presence is fading....if was an oc instead of a popular wifu I might have actually started ignoring her in story same with the other side character.... excluding MC's daughter (ilezabeth) a little ....for ex intraction with all might I was a good start but ended up in few paragraph in last chapter of the arc..(like he used magic to this and that and all might Healed and become friends and over.....) in all out round up...their wasn't and intraction worth mentioning with the world mha itself...like their wasn't much between the people of the and aside from may 3-5 character... even that was minimum Even that was just casual conversation even few events that happened became plain because he just manipulated everyone memories to make that changes seem natural so he won't have to deal with anything....or explain anything ect author mc would become isolated like this with no public or society intraction which will make repeated and boring last what I can think is mc unstable personalty at times.... with no development.. some time he is adopting kid another second he becomes killing machine jus because let see someone bump into him or insulted his family oso kill everyone in sight, even if the character killed has potential to be Ally so their not much development in his personality...as he is isolated from other and prefer manipulating their memories instead of having any conversation with them...it will disturb his nap....so their is no moral line for him excluding family and friends ,he transfer artificial memories on others so they in a way do his bidding even if he knew that character wasn't that bad ex------- flair..... their was no harm done still he kills her..,so him using magic to be alone instead of well kinda like forming friendship or something like that even though he knew about her doesn't help and hamper his character growth, I don't mind killing... but using memory manipulation so he won't have to explain to his friends or those around him doesn't leave much material for his growth or any side or support character growth....so 3✳️ for both character and story development update stability good so 4✳️ and well world background we all know but without solid character or story base....the novel has kinda become like overall summary of the novel I will still continue to read hope it gets better again THANKS FOR THE NOVEL AUTHOR IT IS GREAT READ HOPE MY REVIEW MAY HELP EVEN IF LITTLE , IF I OFFENDED YOU IN ANY WAY I AM SOORY (you don't really have to decrease his strength to develop character you can do it by intracting with surrounding... you can take reference from a fic based on devil is part timer ... quiet a good fic op mc good development THANKS AGAIN HOPE IT MAY HELP EVERYONE

TheGodSage
TheGodSageLv13

Skyrim opens with an Imperial wagon driving four prisoners down a snowy mountain pass. All are seated and bound; the one dressed in finery is gagged.] Ralof: Hey, you. You’re finally awake. You were trying to cross the border, right? Walked right into that Imperial ambush, same as us, and that thief over there. Lokir: D**n you Stormcloaks. Skyrim was fine until you came along. Empire was nice and lazy. If they hadn’t been looking for you, I could’ve stolen that horse and been half way to Hammerfell. You there. You and me — we should be here. It’s these Stormcloaks the Empire wants. Ralof: We’re all brothers and sisters in binds now, thief. Imperial Soldier: Shut up back there! [Lokir looks at the gagged man.] Lokir: And what’s wrong with him? Ralof: Watch your tongue! You’re speaking to Ulfric Stormcloak, the true High King. Lokir: Ulfric? The Jarl of Windhelm? You’re the leader of the rebellion. But if they captured you… Oh gods, where are they taking us? Ralof: I don’t know where we’re going, but Sovngarde awaits. Lokir: No, this can’t be happening. This isn’t happening. Ralof: Hey, what village are you from, horse thief? Lokir: Why do you care? Ralof: A Nord’s last thoughts should be of home. Lokir: Rorikstead. I’m…I’m from Rorikstead. [They approach the village of Helgen. A soldier calls out to the lead wagon.] Imperial Soldier: General Tullius, sir! The headsman is waiting! General Tullius: Good. Let’s get this over with. Lokir: Shor, Mara, Dibella, Kynareth, Akatosh. Divines, please help me. Ralof: Look at him, General Tullius the Military Governor. And it looks like the Thalmor are with him. D**n elves. I bet they had something to do with this. This is Helgen. I used to be sweet on a girl from here. Wonder if Vilod is still making that mead with juniper berries mixed in. Funny…when I was a boy, Imperial walls and towers used to make me feel so safe. [A man and son watch the prisoners pull into town.] Haming: Who are they, daddy? Where are they going? Torolf: You need to go inside, little cub. Haming: Why? I want to watch the soldiers. Torolf: Inside the house. Now.

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