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2021-03-19 11:25

please don't drop the story.please don't drop the story.please don't drop the story.please don't drop the story.please don't drop the story.

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TempestasUmbraLv15

First of all, the whole background and the world building in this story is really great. Very unique and interesting. BUT sadly the plot starts out great and then just implodes on itself. Let me explain: The author stated rellatively early on that he doesn‘t luke cliche development, forced plots and idi*tic MCs, which I greatly appreciate, because I also had enough of them... The system was also ver intriguing and original, as was the early development of the story. But all that was lost, when the author(around chapter 20) just forced the plot into a direction that makes no sense. Minimal spoilers ahead! Beware! From the appearence of a young master to the betrayal from his own tribesmen and being enslaved, all packed into one or two chapters, none of it made sense or wasn‘t cliche. During all this we don‘t see a mature ex-military man making calm and logical decisions. No, what we got was a typical dumb MC relying on his protagonist aura and plot armor to survive. One of the most infuriating parts was, that he doesn‘t acitively use his sytem to gain strenght. No, he just keeps his FP(system points) stored and than gets owned like an id*ot. He practically wasted 10yrs of his life with the ultimate cheat, namely linitless knowledge, and didn‘t gain enough strenght to be more than one of probably dozens of elite tribe warriors. So, if this isn‘t nerfing or a typical dumb MC, than I don‘t know what is... Moving on, he is enslaved and again doesn‘t even use the system to ask about the method they used to restrain him or for a way to break it, despit the massive amount of points he has available. The author made some lame excuse about not wanting to stand out in case of an interrogation, but one chapter later he used his system to learn their language. Contradiction at its finest! From there the story starts to make less and less sense to me. After being bought by some aristocartic magician and losing his restraints, his ‚owner‘ proceeds to treat him like some honorable guest and not an uncertain threat, despite having no knowledge about him or his capabilities, excluding the war between ‚barbarians‘(which the MC is part of) and the ‚southerners‘(which she is part of). All that is once again glossed over by the author, with another laughable excuse, that she wants to know if barbarians can learn their magic. This woman, who is supposedly someone from noble status and a magician to boot, shows zero common sense by teaching a foreigner about a power that gives their part of the world a military advantage, to be able to contend with the barbarians and doesn‘t even use some kind of restraining method in case he turns against her. Another absolutely baffling moment was, when he showed of his cultivation technique which was better than that of his ‚owner‘ and she didn‘t even ask him about it, demanded to teach or even tries to trade for it. Despite her possessing knowledge about how rare and valueable these techniques are. I could only question myself about who the slave and the master where in their relationship, as they didn‘t talk about it, nor did the MC ever ask her about his freedom... Again something the author didn‘t clarify and glossed over... The author also seems very defensive when asked about these obvious flaws, and didn‘t give a clear answer. I do not recommend this story to all those who have problems with plotholes and a forced development, as this story will drive you crazy.

Az1Lv3

Somebody's gonna flame me for this one. First off, Webnovel Readers' fetish for protagonists that aren't 'goody two shoes' blinds them to any other aspect of Characterization. The character of Ivo is whatever the plot needs it to be, from what I can see, the one constant being that he's a somewhat average person with a somewhat ambiguous moral compass d a practical mind set and zero naïvete. That's...okay, but outside of that, I don't see much consistency here. But the real problem in my opinion is the author's writing style. It's very 'Tell not Show'...Which is very much NOT something you want to see in an author. Rather than choosing to show Ivo's personality traits slowly through action and character development, the author tends to tell us why a character does something directly. it's something I see a lot on webnovel and it's unfortunate because it weakens a lot of otherwise good novels. Moving on...The plot is essentially an isekai that subverts a few different common tropes of the genre...and so far, little more than a few. Ivo seems set up to be mostly the center of the plot, and there is little outside of him, which is unfortunate. The truly sad part is that if you can get past the author's writing style, somewhat thin characterization, and...very un-special plot. The rest of the story is quite good, as the rest of the reviewers can attest. And the only issues it has are quite common ones. In conclusion, if you can endure somewhat standard development and somewhat poor writing quality, this story is definitely for you. if you have a very gourmet taste in webnovels however...You will probably not like this one.

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