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2021-03-13 17:25

Honest Review: Writing quality is really impeccable. There don’t seem to be many spelling errors or grammar errors at all. The vocabulary and phrases may confuse some people, but can be resolved with google if uou do try to search it up like a normal person. The story itself and the plot behind it is really good. It mainly talks about a world full of racism and magic. I would like to see how the plot continues, but a couple of things prevent me from enjoying said plot. As I said the story and plot is good, but it just seems very wordy, there are entire massive descriptions of the scenery that can be cut down. It’s fine to leave them there if it’s relevant to the story. There is also a lot, and I mean a lot of intention to detail in this story which dilutes a lot of the main points. Other than that, I can definitely see a lot of potential behind this story. A suggestion I’ll add that may help you benefit a bit would be to add a bit of the character’s thoughts here and there. Because, currently I just feel like an outsider to the whole entire story. -Sleepy

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