Review Detail of Pragmatico in [(Error Unknown) System]
Review detail
Kinda confused about the system and how it functions. He keeps getting things but the system never leveled up so far. He also hasnt done any kimgdom building yet and im a good 20 chapters in. A lot of grammar errors from big to small mistakes like using he and not his. The world doesnt have magic anymore according to Val but yet they ise magic for the shadow magic. He also crafted a dagger but now cant craft anything and is forced to buy a new skill that magically unlocked for him to use out of no where
[(Error Unknown) System]
PhantomMedjay
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Thanks for the review Pragmatico! Ill make sure to go through and fix up the issues. Orignally, magic and everything else was supposed to be available early on, however I want to create a slower moving story that kind of explains his development. The system 'giving' some help to Ben is part of my vision for the system. something that wont be touch on till much later.
Seems like a good story just needs to be touched up in some areas and somethings will probably get explained latter like you just hinted but good liuk with the story!
PhantomMedjay:Pragmatico, Honeslty thank you for you comments while you read through the chapters. Did not see have those issues to be frank, so I probably will focus this week on thoroughly reading through everything I have posted. Your input has meant a lot.image