Review Detail of Demiurge_Ohara in I Am an Evil Lord Yet, Why Are They Happy to Serve Under Me?
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I've already readen the story in questionable questing and seeing not much of a change here, I would say 3 star at best. perhaps even lower. it's filled with plot holes and lacklustre nuances on every character, the story is mostly genetic and lacklustre. the haste and unnecessary info dump hurts my eyes and a waste of space and the Mc lacks formal knowledge regarding business management and is inefficient & too emotional for proper business cutthroat. his wisdom is... for the lack of better word. nonexistent, even his development is deteriorating with no progress in learning from his mistakes and tackles everything via Plot armour with ease. all in all. it's very generic, predictable and lacklustre. I honestly don't find anything exceptional from the Mc or his Company. also an advice: download Grammarly.
I Am an Evil Lord Yet, Why Are They Happy to Serve Under Me?
Zimrence
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don't be discouraged, trust me that you'll learn a acquire a lot of experience by seeing the perspectives of your readers and this story.... is more of a trial run. im guessing it's your first? pretty sure that you'll see me in the QQ since I'm using the same pic(sadly, I don't crosspost much ). and trust me, this is waaaaaay better than my first.
Zimrence:Thank you for the review! ( ‘-ωก̀ )
I'm really grateful for this review. I don't get critic reviews that much. I'll try to improve my writing.
Demiurge_Ohara:don't be discouraged, trust me that you'll learn a acquire a lot of experience by seeing the perspectives of your readers and this story.... is more of a trial run. im guessing it's your first? pretty sure that you'll see me in the QQ since I'm using the same pic(sadly, I don't crosspost much ). and trust me, this is waaaaaay better than my first.
honestly in my own opinion, the execution is alreadya lost cause with the fragile foundation and all. I don't recommend time skips as they'll affect your progress (All forms of progress such as the Background, Characters and System.) and I heavily advise you to make simpler system with... reasonable events unfolding. don't rely on luck reasoning or plot armour, I don't expect books comparable on the likes of Wildbow and Steaven but execution (technicalities) is far more better than premise (creativity ) in my opinion . (Can't have both since they're rather rare.)
Zimrence:I'm really grateful for this review. I don't get critic reviews that much. I'll try to improve my writing.
Thank you. I will need to change things since the novel I've based this fic on is the one with thick plot armor and lucky MC. It might be hard to fix some scenarios since I've thought through them.
Demiurge_Ohara:honestly in my own opinion, the execution is alreadya lost cause with the fragile foundation and all. I don't recommend time skips as they'll affect your progress (All forms of progress such as the Background, Characters and System.) and I heavily advise you to make simpler system with... reasonable events unfolding. don't rely on luck reasoning or plot armour, I don't expect books comparable on the likes of Wildbow and Steaven but execution (technicalities) is far more better than premise (creativity ) in my opinion . (Can't have both since they're rather rare.)
Huh. you're surprisingly reasonable and open minded, a far cry from most authors this site has. Also I don't want to ruin your novela, you can just write another one but this one is created under the experience you've brought from one of your books. Look at mine, despite having questionable writing ( I only write whenever I'm stressed or drunk.) I didn't deleted them. because I'm not ashamed of my progress, I believe that writing a world of fictitious tale is a great hobby that correlates with our own persona, so yeah. While I don't expect a 5 star luxury, I am rather intrigued at what you'll come out to be. sorry if I'm rambling, kinda talk a lot when it comes to my passion .
Zimrence:Thank you. I will need to change things since the novel I've based this fic on is the one with thick plot armor and lucky MC. It might be hard to fix some scenarios since I've thought through them.
Thank you. And I do not mind about the rambling. I will try to write another one. But before that, I'll finish this one first.
Demiurge_Ohara:Huh. you're surprisingly reasonable and open minded, a far cry from most authors this site has. Also I don't want to ruin your novela, you can just write another one but this one is created under the experience you've brought from one of your books. Look at mine, despite having questionable writing ( I only write whenever I'm stressed or drunk.) I didn't deleted them. because I'm not ashamed of my progress, I believe that writing a world of fictitious tale is a great hobby that correlates with our own persona, so yeah. While I don't expect a 5 star luxury, I am rather intrigued at what you'll come out to be. sorry if I'm rambling, kinda talk a lot when it comes to my passion .