no lo leo y ya tengo altas expectativas, solo espero que no sea de eso dónde el MC está roticimo. [img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update]

You get thrown into the story and nothing gets explained. It seems like its based on some random CYOA, but there is no explanation for that either. The story feels plastic at best and holliw at worst. I hope the author sees this and makes some changes because it seems lazy and sad compared to his other Work.

The story was pretty good then you started making all tbe girls bi for some reason and it ruined it I guess give it a shot if you like that stuff but they even do it when hes not there and that feels like ntr

Honestly, at first I wanted to put a unit because of broken expectations in chapter 8. But then I thought about it and decided to be more objective in my assessment. The story itself is good. High level text. Not the linearity of the plot, which sometimes suffers from many fanfics. An attempt to reveal the identity of the characters. All this is a plus. There is only one minus, that in Chapter 8 the moral compass of the character is too overturned. Not what I can accept. in fact, one point is reduced precisely because of a sharp change, even 7 chapters are read about one, and from 8 about the other. Thanks for the story anyway.

you get thrown in the story without any idea about his power or whats happening , the story was editted and some paragraphs dosent make sense . chapter comments confuse you cause they are all the old version and talking about something not in the chapter the story needs a rewrite or a chapter with the mc powers atleast stopped reading at chapter 11

Dude first of all you should give some kind of intro and atleast basic info about his powers before starting the story. Now the idea is a good one and the MC is not bad either but in trying to make it realistic you are just making him look angsty and emo brood as well sometimes. Though still quite a good read and will be waiting to see which worlds would he travel in the future.

My ratings should say enough. Story was interesting for the first 30-50 Chapters. But became alot worse the further I read this Story, would have finished the Story to if it would have been finished here. But the Paywall showed its ugly Head. So read this Story if you like SI with CYOA.

Its really good keep up the good work please don't drop it like your other fanfic which was really good as well................................

Writing- 4 star Story D- 2 Character- 2 update- 4 background- 4 Mmm... Everything is decent, but everything goes downhill when the salem arc is approaching. grammar, plot, execution and characteristics. MC:Jaune is a naive, reckless and gullible man that convinces himself that he does this and that for the benefit of Remnant. as the chapters release, it was shown that he's slowly becoming Even more reckless, hypocritical. Double standards and all. He broke my expectations for the worst and cause a the death of most populations. also he brainwashed his waifus, and executed them poorly at that. ( Salem arc and the unexpected smex with Raven and Yang. and many more) the quality of plot declines and I stopped reading before he'd traveled in another world.