Review Detail of 100Fahrenheit in Dragon's Paradise (HPxMarvelUniverse) [Dropped]

I hope you don’t take take it as nitpicking, Author but a middle aged woman (attractive one at that) blushing at honestly bad flirting attemps from a 12 year old? I feel like I am reading a **** script not a story. Cringworthy to say the least. Second thing I wanted to say, is that you made the MC overly narcissistic (imo). My humble words, my good looks, my awesome magic, my super rare wand. I think you should tone it down a little. There is wish fullfilment story and there is “bow down peasants”. After reading a bit MC is closer to the latter.