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2021-03-06 10:47

FEEDBACK Author you spam the exclamation mark too much, making it lose meaning and the book having a weird feel Due to the nature of the world and method of power gaining it makes it feel like power gained by the MC is underserved. Grammar and spelling is very good for a book on this site

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Thanks for the review! πŸ’–πŸ’–πŸ’–

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!!!**AUTHOR READ THIS FEEDBACK**!!! I like the fact that the MC gets stronger fast, I get burned out nowadays when powerups take forever to do. There isn't much character and world-building yet but the novel only has like 27 chapters currently so that's kinda expected. Author-san/nim/Kun, keep up the updates and I will feed you my stones, Also you should stop power leveling mc too fast because you're going to hit a writer's block when you realize that you screwed up and made way too OP in a time too early. So, I will give you some advice from the wisdom I gained from reading 300+ books on Webnovel( I have read more on other sites) and finishing 150+ of them, that you should focus on the character and world development first rather than going straight to power leveling mc. Currently, we as the readers don't know anything about our protagonist other than some pieces of information (e,g has no family) and we also don't know enough about the world and how it works and the logic behind it, you don't have to explain everything but give us a good description of some things so we can understand the world and mc better. World and character building is very important and should be done early in because when we (readers) read a new novel, we are like a blank slate, we don't know much about what we should expect and have no clue about the stories world and its characters. Every story is a world of its own (even fanfiction) so when we (readers) start a new novel we are metaphorically 'entering' the world that the author is building for us and is guiding us (readers) through the world and characters that they have created with their own hands. So if the world or character building is messed up then even if it has a good plot, or is interesting, it won't last long or go far. If you have read a Wuxia/ Xianxianovel then you probably know that having a good foundation is ABSOLUTELY important for cultivation or else you won't be able to go far or have enough strength, and that's what World/ character building is, the foundation of your story. So If the foundation was damaged or ruined then you can say goodbye to your cultivation/novel. SO KEEP THAT IN MIND!!!! I hate to see it when a good and interesting story gets ruined because the author messed up and rushed it without properly taking time and slowly building the novel, I have encountered this dozens of times, and each time it leaves me in a bitter mood because sometimes I genuinely enjoy reading some novels but they are just ruined because the author rushed or skipped the important parts that should have been made correctly and properly explained. I sincerely hope that you read this and take more time and consideration because I really don't want another novel with good prospects to join my 'abandoned' pile that I have formed from several years of reading novels, stories, books, and such.

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