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2021-03-02 04:48

Interesting plot so far definitely cant wait to see where this goes, i’m liking yue’s personality and cant wait for when she starts school and gets reunited with her sister. i said this on your doulou dalu fanfic but if you could use more punctuation that would be great just to help space out sentences and help tell when one ends and a new one begins, you could also you commas help. Sorry if i sound a bit rude or pushy/needy there, i really like your novels and ill continue to read can’t wait for more.

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Dao_of_Melancholy
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Haha dont worry about it i love constructive criticism hell i throve on it it helps me improve my storys and what author doesnt want to improve. Either way this one is Highly fun to write its hot do much source material i could work with. My favourite though is still my RWBY one mainly because it was my furst attempt that got me into writing in the first place. if you enjoy this one go check it out maybe leave a review up to You. Have a nIce night

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