Review Detail of AstralGodZero in Pandora’s Kings

I have no shame for doing this xD Feel free to read my story, I believe people will enjoy the plot after a while, I am a newbie writer so give me a chance pls. I have a lot planned for this story, I appreciate any feedback through comments or reviews. Just remember to not be too harsh, I am only human and I am trying my best to create a story everyone enjoys.