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2021-02-24 04:36

Has potential Within first 9 chapters Author has 4 year time skip then uses a flash back to explain something instead of having the event happen then a time skip Mc wants to play basketball in first life but disregards that and starts playing American football which author doesn't make clear is American and not every other countries form of football which they call soccer Mc is around 30 to 40, I get to fit in he hangs around with people his own age from Rebirth but I find that perspective difficult to believe. Imagine if you went back to 7 years old the things that interest children wouldn't interest you dolls toys etc Mc does rediculous training at 7 that wouldn't be physically possible Expect readers to believe that a 7 year old or an 11 year old is more physically fit than his father Lack of slice of life with family growing up after being reborn Doesn't seem to do additional learning. Mc has intelligence of an ***** he would already be able to do multiplications No evidence of investment in 4 years even if its only with pocket money for cutting the grass etc Why no paper round for mc, mc likes running run while in the round/ rounds

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Good things Clear outline at start of mc and his personality Clear on why mc cares so much for new family even with their lack of content Having mc train even if it's outlandish training that would make one punch man proud Mc is socially inclusive even if its hard to believe

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