Item: A Personal Hell for A Winged Killer (Draft 1)
Rating: 4.8
Author: proking

prokingLv113yr

2021-11-23 23:31

I read the prologue and the first chapter. I must say author put a lot of effort in it and it's well written. The quality of the novel is top notch and I didn't find much errors in the vocabulary as well. The only drawback I found is that there is no attention grabber moment in the first chapter. Most readers skip the novel after reading the first chapter and synopsis. If the synopsis is interesting enough to let them read more, they'll stay for more chapters. But in this, everything is confusing. The story started off in the present with a little bit of information of MCs back story and her family's tragic end seven years ago. Other than that, nothing interesting came up that intrigued me to read more. Even the synopsis is short with no information about the main plot that might interest someone. Dear Author, your writing quality is good enough to reach readers attention but if the storyline is not interesting. No one will read it. So, try to put things in the first chapter or synopsis like showing a trailer so that more readers will enjoy your novel with proper understanding what's going on. I know it's just a first chapter but put some elements that is attention grabber. Also, please reedit your synopsis and book cover so that it will attract readers indirectly. Thank you! I'm looking forward for your positive response.

A Personal Hell for A Winged Killer (Draft 1)

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