Review Detail of nayonayo in Strength of Will (Reboot)
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I havent read the reboot yet sorry, just really wanted to give my opinion on the original in my opinion it was cringe but I still enjoyed it. It was a lot more I guess about how she felt and was introspective which nothing wrong with really but like all things it needs to be done right but this wasnt it chief, because it never felt like it added to the story much i never understood the character better because it was repetitive in many ways in my opinion, I didnt learn more i just learnt the same things in a different way. Plus a lot of what she said sorta sounds like “im #deep” stuff from what i remember. I had a lot more to write but as i thought more about it more came back to me and I just gotta say while the original im not gonna say amazing everything it tried to do wasnt forced and well done just the introspective stuff was cringe
Strength of Will (Reboot)
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Well, thanks for the feedback, I guess... ...I am going to a bit honest, but I am currently trying to think about what you told me and all I can say is... ...you aren't really wrong, but also it didn't really occupy my mind to add much more meaning to each of my written sentences. What I tried with the first few chapters is not adding more meaning to it, or make things for meaningfull, deeper. I tried to reinforce what was already existing, because at times, I just had the feeling that what I tried to tell, wasn't as clear as I wanted to be, I didn't really try to add more depth, I tried to polish what I already had. As a newbie in writing, I am still kind of bad with pacing and using the time and space I have effectively. And of course the cringe comes along with me trying too hard at times, I guess. Anyways, I am really trying my hardest and thank you for your review. I am going to do my best to continue to improve.