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Mel_Aniv
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2021-05-11 16:33

REVIEW Narration: Decent and immersive Worldbuilding: Vast and detailed Character development: Nice and steady Character design: Outstanding Dialogues: Realistic and Lifelike Pacing: Not fast nor too slow Writing quality: Magnificent Execution of the Genre: Good pitch Story potential: High Updating Stability: Steady MESSAGE This novel was inspiring me to write! So far so good! I am sure this will pave well in the future as the author is talented. The story was eye-catching and hooking! Kudos! The author is better writer than me so I can't say much. 😉 ADVICE Some sentences are not starting with capital letters. I guess you should check it out.

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Dnii_Lii
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Mel_Aniv
Mel_AnivLv4

From review swap dear author........ please also check out mine, please 🙏 😉 ❤️

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Dnii_Lii
Dnii_LiiAuthor

Wow...such a detailed review, aha. I'll definitely check out your works. And thanks for your time!

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Dnii_Lii
Dnii_LiiAuthor

and advice!

Dnii_Lii:Wow...such a detailed review, aha. I'll definitely check out your works. And thanks for your time!
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Mel_Aniv
Mel_AnivLv4

You can review my work Grandmaster Of All Job Class. It was for my humble Spirity entry and badly needed your feedback. Hope you enjoy! Hehe 😉 ❤️

Dnii_Lii:Wow...such a detailed review, aha. I'll definitely check out your works. And thanks for your time!
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